Marion Philippe
English 8
Mr. Salsich
05-01-10
Forever and Always:
Dear reader,
Although all of our definitions differ of what a friend should be like, in this essay I will describe what my definition of a friend is. I will explain the word friendship using four multigenres; my favorite quote, an acrostic poem, a fictional story and an expository paragraph.
Sincerely,
Marion
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English 8
Mr. Salsich
05-01-10
Forever and Always:
Dear reader,
Although all of our definitions differ of what a friend should be like, in this essay I will describe what my definition of a friend is. I will explain the word friendship using four multigenres; my favorite quote, an acrostic poem, a fictional story and an expository paragraph.
Sincerely,
Marion
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Quote
"There are good ships and there are wood ships – ships that sail the sea. But the best ships are friendships and may they always be," (author unknown).
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"There are good ships and there are wood ships – ships that sail the sea. But the best ships are friendships and may they always be," (author unknown).
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Acrostic Poem
From the beginning to the end
Reinforcing us when we are suffocated by our problems
Injecting us with laughter
Enduring the ups and downs that come before us
Never letting go of the stupendous memories
Drifting into each other’s arms for comfort
Shouting and laughing at every possible moment
Having long conversations
Inspiring one another to succeed
Proud to be friends for as long as can be
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From the beginning to the end
Reinforcing us when we are suffocated by our problems
Injecting us with laughter
Enduring the ups and downs that come before us
Never letting go of the stupendous memories
Drifting into each other’s arms for comfort
Shouting and laughing at every possible moment
Having long conversations
Inspiring one another to succeed
Proud to be friends for as long as can be
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Fictional Story
Letting my best friend go was the most hurtful thing I ever did. Seeing her car leave the driveway and fading into the horizon leaves me with a bitter taste in my mouth. I remember crying, begging for her not to move, but all she did was hold me and tell me that everything was going to be okay until her eyes started to fill with water. The tears finally became a waterfall on her cheeks, and I could tell by the way she talked that her throat was clamping up. Knowing that this would be the last hug and the last talk, except for the phone calls and emails, we hugged tighter and in an instant let go of each other. I watched her get comfortable in her car before telling her I would miss her one last time. As she closed her door, I felt my mom holding me, but I quickly got loose so I could run towards the moving car. I ran and ran for what seemed an infinite amount of time, but it was well too late. The car was gone, and it hit me square in the face; I realized that this would be the last long run of an inconceivable, memorable friendship that will never be forgotten.
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Letting my best friend go was the most hurtful thing I ever did. Seeing her car leave the driveway and fading into the horizon leaves me with a bitter taste in my mouth. I remember crying, begging for her not to move, but all she did was hold me and tell me that everything was going to be okay until her eyes started to fill with water. The tears finally became a waterfall on her cheeks, and I could tell by the way she talked that her throat was clamping up. Knowing that this would be the last hug and the last talk, except for the phone calls and emails, we hugged tighter and in an instant let go of each other. I watched her get comfortable in her car before telling her I would miss her one last time. As she closed her door, I felt my mom holding me, but I quickly got loose so I could run towards the moving car. I ran and ran for what seemed an infinite amount of time, but it was well too late. The car was gone, and it hit me square in the face; I realized that this would be the last long run of an inconceivable, memorable friendship that will never be forgotten.
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Expository Paragraph
TS: Throughout William Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet, strong bonds take place, creating memorable friendships. SD: When Romeo is in a dismal mood, Benvolio, his cousin and best friend, tries to support him through his pain. CM: Although Romeo saw Benvolio trying to help him, “[… Romeo] was ‘ware of [Benvolio] and stole into the covert of the wood.” CM: Benvolio knew Romeo enough to know that the best action that he could do was to let Romeo go. SD: Likewise, when Romeo and Juliet meet, not only do sparks fly, but a friendship has been created. CM: After the party, when Juliet describes her love for Romeo from her balcony, Romeo listens with attentive ears before speaking his mind. CM: He helps her decide, like friends helping each other, until she falls for his charm and says, “My bounty is as boundless as the sea, my love as deep. The more I give to thee, the more I have, for both are infinite.” CS: Friendships can be created through love or despair, but every friendship is worthwhile.
Self Assessment Essay 21:
-The hardest part of this essay was coming up with my expository paragraph. I wanted to find good examples from the book, and I also wanted my sentences to have coherence. Also in my acrostic poem, it was hard finding good words that started with the letters.
-I think that I took out some unnecessary words and I also made my sentences flow a little better. At the beginning, my sentences felt a little bit chunky and like they didn’t fit where they belonged.
-I liked my different genres used throughout the essay. I thought that I chose the right ones that would really describe what friendship should be like. However, my favorite genre was the quote because it really shows that we should try to keep friendships for as long as can be.
-I think that I could’ve used more big words throughout the multigenre essay and that my expository paragraph should have been stronger.
TS: Throughout William Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet, strong bonds take place, creating memorable friendships. SD: When Romeo is in a dismal mood, Benvolio, his cousin and best friend, tries to support him through his pain. CM: Although Romeo saw Benvolio trying to help him, “[… Romeo] was ‘ware of [Benvolio] and stole into the covert of the wood.” CM: Benvolio knew Romeo enough to know that the best action that he could do was to let Romeo go. SD: Likewise, when Romeo and Juliet meet, not only do sparks fly, but a friendship has been created. CM: After the party, when Juliet describes her love for Romeo from her balcony, Romeo listens with attentive ears before speaking his mind. CM: He helps her decide, like friends helping each other, until she falls for his charm and says, “My bounty is as boundless as the sea, my love as deep. The more I give to thee, the more I have, for both are infinite.” CS: Friendships can be created through love or despair, but every friendship is worthwhile.
Self Assessment Essay 21:
-The hardest part of this essay was coming up with my expository paragraph. I wanted to find good examples from the book, and I also wanted my sentences to have coherence. Also in my acrostic poem, it was hard finding good words that started with the letters.
-I think that I took out some unnecessary words and I also made my sentences flow a little better. At the beginning, my sentences felt a little bit chunky and like they didn’t fit where they belonged.
-I liked my different genres used throughout the essay. I thought that I chose the right ones that would really describe what friendship should be like. However, my favorite genre was the quote because it really shows that we should try to keep friendships for as long as can be.
-I think that I could’ve used more big words throughout the multigenre essay and that my expository paragraph should have been stronger.
Although you put the genres in the "Dear Reader," you should put them at the top of each section as well.
ReplyDeleteIn your acrostic, in line "R" I think you should replace "into" with just "in", because it sounds more correct.
The story, whether it was true or not, was amazingly written and was a great story. Keep up the good work!
1. You might be able to tighten the first sentence in the dear reader note--you said "should be" twice, and if you rearrange some words, you might be able to cut down drastically on the amount of words used.
ReplyDelete2. In the 8-sent. paragraph, you said "Williams Shakespeare," but probably meant "William Shakespeare."
3. I really like the acrostic poem, especially the line with "injecting us with laughter." It's a nice metaphor. Excellent work!
I think you can cut down your first sentence by sayin what a friend is, because that is really what you are trying to explain.
ReplyDeleteI think that you need to say where you got you quote from. I think?!?
Great job, I love your essay, it is one of your best yet, good luck correcting.